of everything I meant to do:
The bed of strawberries, leaves frozen, ground frozen,
crying silently for a cover of straw.
The garden hose coiled neatly; a snake of ice.
The cannas bulbs undug
waiting patiently beneath stiffly frozen stalks.
Those potted plants,
drenched by the last rain,
anchored in place on the porch step.
Their immovable solidness a mockery
of all my good intentions.
This is something I just finished this morning... not necessarily an assigment from the book...
ReplyDeleteI quite like this one. :)
ReplyDeleteSince it reads like a list, I'm wondering a bit about punctuation and spacing. For example, would it work to put a colon after "everything I meant to do" and then have the examples follow, inset like a bulleted list?
Also, is the last sentence in reference to all the items or just the potted plants?
Thanks for sharing!
Good suggestions... I am not sure how to get the blog to realize what I am trying to do, though. I inset each line after the first, and it published it as you see above:) I need to play with this to see if I can get it to publish like I want it to.
ReplyDeleteQuestion: are the last two sentences better left as a different thought from the list, or added to it? The last sentence is supposed to refer to the potted plant, but also sum up the whole poem.
I tried insetting the lines using the blockquote function....
ReplyDeleteNow that I read it again, I'm in the mood for some illustrations. :)